Post by seketta on Aug 2, 2010 21:13:07 GMT -5
Seketta really, really, really needs feedback on her story! She is trying to work on it, but it is extremely difficult for her to find inspiration.
Oh yes, this story is (C) to Seketta...
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So far what she has after 4 hours of thinking...
A large, blocky wolf-like figure padded slowly through a large clearing. The wolf made sure to keep low to the ground and stick near the shadows. Her dark, streaked fur masked her slightly in her natural surroundings. Her large paws treaded gently over the moist ground. The beads of water that were resting on the grass from the night previous rubbed off on her, tipping the feathers along her legs with dew. As her paws carried her to the edge of the field and into a small cave, she stood to her full height. Her shoulder was at about a four foot height. Her brilliant mechanical eyes focused on a slight human figure that moved slowly toward her. The human seemed like a child, due to size. His head was just a fraction higher than the female wolf’s shoulder. “Hello, Strata.” He said in a glossy voice.
The female wolf looked at the boy with pleased eyes. “Is this what you need, Jake?” Strata asked. Her jaws opened and revealed a small, light blue egg. The boy known as Jake smoothed the ruffled fur between her ears lovingly. He had created Strata in the lab that he had worked at before the disaster happened. Something had gone wrong that day, some kind of explosion. It had shot Jake and Strata through some kind of portal that linked to another world. Some sort of fantasy world that was very similar to Jake’s home planet.
Oh yes, this story is (C) to Seketta...
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So far what she has after 4 hours of thinking...
A large, blocky wolf-like figure padded slowly through a large clearing. The wolf made sure to keep low to the ground and stick near the shadows. Her dark, streaked fur masked her slightly in her natural surroundings. Her large paws treaded gently over the moist ground. The beads of water that were resting on the grass from the night previous rubbed off on her, tipping the feathers along her legs with dew. As her paws carried her to the edge of the field and into a small cave, she stood to her full height. Her shoulder was at about a four foot height. Her brilliant mechanical eyes focused on a slight human figure that moved slowly toward her. The human seemed like a child, due to size. His head was just a fraction higher than the female wolf’s shoulder. “Hello, Strata.” He said in a glossy voice.
The female wolf looked at the boy with pleased eyes. “Is this what you need, Jake?” Strata asked. Her jaws opened and revealed a small, light blue egg. The boy known as Jake smoothed the ruffled fur between her ears lovingly. He had created Strata in the lab that he had worked at before the disaster happened. Something had gone wrong that day, some kind of explosion. It had shot Jake and Strata through some kind of portal that linked to another world. Some sort of fantasy world that was very similar to Jake’s home planet.
I am very willing to help anyone that requires it, although I am completely useless at HTML XD.